Recount Writing - WW1

In Room 10, we've been working on adding more detail to our writing by using our senses and recrafting our sentences so that there is more than one idea in them. 

We watched a short video called Canada's 100 days and we had to imagine as if we were there, a soldier battling for our country. 

Some of us worked with Mrs Faalili to enhance our paragraphs and used visualisation to really think about what we could see and hear around us.

Here are some of the amazing drafts that some of the awesome students in Room 10 came up with. 

Be sure to check out the individual blogs for more amazing recounts. 

Detailed writing

This week, we have been working on adding detail to our writing. 

We watched a short video about The Old Lady in the Junkyard and had to describe what she was doing. We had to make sure that each sentence told 3 pieces of information. We then had a sharing circle and had to share ONE of our sentences that has really good description. 

Here they are 

Old Lady in the Junkyard - Recount. 

Tiana

One average morning I was in my house that was in the junkyard. I went to the junkyard and searched high and low around the junkyard because I was looking for useful random, objects that I could use for my house. 

Miracle

I was looking through the junkyard and I saw a ring and decorated my house high and low. 

Jonay

When I got home I grabbed my stuff I found and I thought I made something. 

Jordan

Today I was planning to escape from the junkyard so I can have a good life and not die in the junkyard and starve to death. 

Liston

One day I was at the junkyard looking for stuff. I saw lots of cool objects and grabbed those materials to make an amazing invention. 

Lucky

One day when the sun was setting down I was picking up some stuff.

Demitrius

In the morning I was looking for stuff so I can make my house look like Christmas.

Tracey

I’m happy with who I am and what I can do. I have collected things that satisfy from me, Sherry.

Lesileli

I was poor but I was creative. 

Mone

I’ve been living in this place for several and I have created my own little world. 

Leeroy

I’ve been living in this junkyard for years and made my own little house. Everyone always judged me but I didn’t care. 

Zeta

For 15 years I’ve been living in a junkyard. I didn’t know who my parents were or my family. 

Tee

For 27 years I’ve lived in this junkyard and no one has ever visited me. 

Olive

One night I was at the junkyard and I found some JUNK!

Skyla

I went to an old rugged box and searched through it and found a yellow and orange spotted umbrella that I could use. 

Moni

For 30 years I lived in this junk yard and never ever knew who my parents were or my family and no one ever visited me. 

Lexi

I opened the old rusty box and found and old broken umbrella. It looked like doritos with cheese on it. 

Kahnye

Although I didn’t own much, I am happy and appreciate everything.