Detailed writing

This week, we have been working on adding detail to our writing. 

We watched a short video about The Old Lady in the Junkyard and had to describe what she was doing. We had to make sure that each sentence told 3 pieces of information. We then had a sharing circle and had to share ONE of our sentences that has really good description. 

Here they are 

Old Lady in the Junkyard - Recount. 

Tiana

One average morning I was in my house that was in the junkyard. I went to the junkyard and searched high and low around the junkyard because I was looking for useful random, objects that I could use for my house. 

Miracle

I was looking through the junkyard and I saw a ring and decorated my house high and low. 

Jonay

When I got home I grabbed my stuff I found and I thought I made something. 

Jordan

Today I was planning to escape from the junkyard so I can have a good life and not die in the junkyard and starve to death. 

Liston

One day I was at the junkyard looking for stuff. I saw lots of cool objects and grabbed those materials to make an amazing invention. 

Lucky

One day when the sun was setting down I was picking up some stuff.

Demitrius

In the morning I was looking for stuff so I can make my house look like Christmas.

Tracey

I’m happy with who I am and what I can do. I have collected things that satisfy from me, Sherry.

Lesileli

I was poor but I was creative. 

Mone

I’ve been living in this place for several and I have created my own little world. 

Leeroy

I’ve been living in this junkyard for years and made my own little house. Everyone always judged me but I didn’t care. 

Zeta

For 15 years I’ve been living in a junkyard. I didn’t know who my parents were or my family. 

Tee

For 27 years I’ve lived in this junkyard and no one has ever visited me. 

Olive

One night I was at the junkyard and I found some JUNK!

Skyla

I went to an old rugged box and searched through it and found a yellow and orange spotted umbrella that I could use. 

Moni

For 30 years I lived in this junk yard and never ever knew who my parents were or my family and no one ever visited me. 

Lexi

I opened the old rusty box and found and old broken umbrella. It looked like doritos with cheese on it. 

Kahnye

Although I didn’t own much, I am happy and appreciate everything.